“Another kind of UPOVR is *Unnecessary Action Description* … The technique of using whatever your POV character perceives as the subject(s) of your sentences also helps you eliminate *Unnecessary Action Description*. … Brent walked through his fire-damaged childhood home. The *walls and ceiling* of the familiar front room had burned through to the studs. Weeks after the fire, *smoke* still permeated the air. *The damage* concentrated where the fire had started at the kitchen stove, now a *charred hulk* nearly breaking through buckling floorboards. *Eerie silence* in the family room replaced years of blasting TV and childish noise. *Smoky soot* layered the upstairs bathroom where *the giant mirror*, warped and cracked by heat, splintered and bloated his image. *The fluorescent desk light* in his bedroom had shattered . . .” (Stephen Geez, Point of View (POV) #5: UPOVRs)
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